Do you like music? Hmmm... I bet you do! Well, do you want to tuned in to music when you are in bad mood or bored? Yes! I know you do! Then how about Rock n' Roll music? All you need to do is try to listen to one of my favorite Rock n' Roll band named AC/DC! What the heck is that band's name!? Well AC/DC stands for Alternating Current/Direct Current! Wow! What an electrifying name! Well, I don't understand what it means! That's wierd! But all of their music is very good! I like their music especially "THUNDERSTRUCK","Shoot to Thrill","War Machine","Back in Black", and many more! If you will listen to one of their songs, you will be fired! You will be nailed! Your bad mood will be gone forevermore! And this will make you electrified the whole day! Wow! Rock n' Roll baby!
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